Wow so uh the sex scene was amazing! All I have to say is, if you don't want you're more detective like readers to freak out, you should not something about the condom afterwards, otherwise we'll think you intentionally left it out for mystery...leading to a pregnancy scare. That's it, otherwise, perfect especially for a first timer:)
DOES IT COUNT IF I DO ALL 20 COMMENTS MYSELF?? :) and oli sykes should appear because he's awesomesauce!! :) oh and this chapter was amusing. i would be just as embarrassed as amber if i heard the words 'risque' and 'bathing suit' together. lol :) update soon?
I am in love with your story. At first, it lay in my subscription box unread but then I started to read it and was immeadiatley hooked to it. I love it so much!!!! I can easily say that I AM ADDICTED to your story. Amazing.
P.S. The last chapter was awesome, perfect. Can't wait for you to update!
Pffft, I want a topless photograph of David Westfield. Haha. By the way, you're a really great writer and I look forward to reading your story everyday, keep it up! :)