Maybe It's Real - Comments

"Be careful." She whispers.
"Be careful," she whispers.

If you ever need a beta, feel free to message me.
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Anyways, I'm really falling in love with this story. It's really simple, like I said before, but it's perfect that way. If anything, maybe the chapters could be a tad longer, since I feel like they're a little tooshort, meaning that the story's going to take a while to take off.
Otherwise, as you already know, I really like it.
<3

very nice (: I like it please update soon!

Your layout's gorgeous. And thanks for introducing me to a song that I actually like a lot.
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Maybe it ws the way he held me.
was.
that hinted happiness.
that hinted at happiness.
when I could fainlly call
finally.

I find it out how you switch perspectives so quickly, from third to second. Maybe you should just stick to one?

They haven't been
hadn't.
And then you change tenses as well, from past to present. Again, maybe just one?
"He won't wake up." She whispers,
"He won't wake up," she whispers.
I was Melodys age.
Melody's.

Otherwise I really like it. Abuse stories tend to intrigue me, and I'm really interested to see where you're going to go with this. I like how you introduce family as well, for the most part a lot of stories blatently forget about such things. The chapters are short, so there isn't much to say, but so far it's lovely.
:)

This is really sad. :') And interesting.
More please. <3

Awww this is soo sad, but I gotta read more!

Doll this is really good I wonder where it will go

OMG!! This story looks amazing please I beg update!

KEEP IT!! =)
May want to go through the spellings, but it sounds really really good =D!!
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