The Other Side of Pain - Comments

I loved the detail and real-ness you wrote this with. Though the layout is a bit off, I didn't mind, because it's the story I care about.

Your writing structure is very strong, and the intimacy is so well displayed in this. I love that you gave your character life, and that she was guilty. Sometimes I read stories on here about affairs, and the characters are cold-hearted bitches. Though that may be the case sometimes, I loved that you gave her guilt.

Overall, great job.

A-Mmaaaazzinnggg. just so you know.

Title
I don't really have any feelings toward the title. I don't hate it but it doesn't particularly grab my attention. I'm so glad that it's not like a legit fifty word sentence like some of the stories on here. >.<

Layout
This, I do not like. The story content is so far off to the right that I can't even read it without scrolling all the way over to the side. As well as that, the photo isn't aligned equally and the coloring is bleck.

Content
The first thing I'd like to say is that windowsill is one word. Okay, so here we go. I want to apologize before hand if this isn't that great of a review and if it doesn't make sense. I'm sick and my head is a bit muggy.

I really enjoyed the detail you put into this. From the cinnamon smell to the lace undergarments. It works really well with the rest of the story. I just got a great, great feeling from reading this and honestly, I feel like you could get a shit ton readers if you fixed the layout. Very nice. :) I'm so sorry this isn't that great, when I can think straight I'll certainly give you a better review.

Reading this I though it was well written. There was nothing I didn't like, there were no errors, and it was simple, yet beautiful. You really portrayed what it's like to cheat-you explained the guilt, and the desire for another person. I really loved this.

She shivered, feeling a guilty chill go up her spine. That guilty chill had plagued her ever since she had started seeing him.--That is well said, saying she is plagued by that chill ever since she met him. They had shared soft kisses filled with more romance than they ever had. He held her in his arms during the slow dances, and she just wanted to stay forever.--I am a helpless romantic, and seeing this just made me shiver in delight. It also gave me a small visualization in my head.

Your ending was unpredictable, which I loved. See, I thought the woman was the one cheating. But it was actually the man. The women only knew he was cheating but she stayed anyways. That was just so amazing how you made that twist. He was probably back with his wife now, making love to the wrong woman. It was over; he was never coming back. He had gone too far. I had to read the last line to know it was actually him cheating. This was quite an enjoyable read <3
The layout was also lovely. Simple, yet eye catching, nicely done <3

So this was different than I thought it would be. haha. Not in a bad way, mind you. For some reason I was expecting something more... chilling? But your writing is really, really impressive. You're great at describing things without overdoing it like so many people tend to do.

The layout was okay, though it could be improved. It felt like some of the paragraphs should have been broken up a little more; at times it seemed a little cluttered, though maybe I'm just too happy with the "enter" button with my stuff.

Overall, the story had a very consistent tone, and the plot wasn't expected. Which is good, mind you. The emotions you described felt real. You could really feel her pain, and can clearly understand how she felt. I like how you included guilt; too many stories about adultrey make the main character seem so heartless. Though I don't really read these kind of stories anymore (not insulting here. I just prefer horror and such XD).

You did a great job, and I really can't give you any more con crit than that. You're talented, for sure. (: