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I gotta say, you pretty much blew me away. I was expecting something sweet and cutesy about a dad. Never would I have imagined that I would read something so deep and emotional that came from that tattoo.

I don’t ever want to imagine losing my pops. He may be a dick but he’s a dick that’s loved by his daughter.

I love the words and how they seem to flow in a dark, disturbing yet beautiful way. The imagery was a bit scary. Only because I don’t want to imagine losing my dad, especially that way. I really feel sorry for that girl.

I noticed those things that Carless Whisper said, but they’re not that big of a deal to me. I think you did marvelous.

I like the idea here. Emotional and interesting, etc.

However, there were a few things I noticed. The main thing being:

"Miles away a girl wakes up with tears rolling down her face she’s covered in sweat." -- Run on sentence here. (: There should be a period (.) between "face" and "she's". It would just flow better. That was my thought, anyway.

Overall though, it's really nice. (:

Wow. Just wow.
That was quite amazing. I loved the way you broke it up and the way you explained the tattoo.
Good luck with the contest! <3