Keeping Secrets - Comments

It seems like everything is going by too quickly...the banner/layout isn't my taste, but it's a little eye-catching. As said above, you should add a little more detail-no offense, but the first chapter sort of bored me...you don't want the readers to get bored, no do you? I suggest a little bit more detail. Something I did like though, is the cliffhanger in chapter one and the idea of this. I love stories that have younger girl/older man topics about them.

Wow. I really loved this story! i love it so much! keeping updating! :D :D :D I love the layout too, its really awesome! Keep up the amazing writing!

Some more description would be nice, but this is quite an interesting concept...and it's not bad, by any means Quite good, just needs to be a bit...deeper xD

I like the concept and idea for this story.
Though I thought it was very long and not a lot was said, you kind of just said everything and didn't really give it a lot of meaning.
But I liked it.

I enjoyed reading. And the layout is lovely. I think you could describe things a little fuller, if you know what I mean, just add more.

But anyways, I think it was real good ^_^ Keep it up!

It's quite cute.
But it needs... something deeper.
I feel as though it's simply too this happened and then this happened. this person said. he said. she said. this happened. etc.

Do you know what I mean.
I feel as though the vocabulary could be set to a higher standard, because I believe you have it in you.