Diary of a Lost Soul - Comments

This looked interesting so I clicked it. i was totally right :D I cant wait to read more. I love it so far. Its so interesting and haunting and stuff. I dont know why, but I like reading about characters fucked up lives. Oh and I really like the layout(:

I really like this so far, it seems really interesting. I love stories written in diary format, I'm actually working on one now. It was nice to read yours, I hope you keep going. :D

Why hello, stranger...! Fancy seeing you back here again. ;)

Nice to see that you haven't lost your way with the words. Nice to see a new side to the protagonist infact. Even though the details were just skating along on the surface, I can't wait until it's fully developed and it's less of an expository. Keep up the good work.

Whoa! That was unexpected! Those first few chapters were really good - it gave me gruesome insight on the character.

I'd really like you to finish this! I'd love to see the character development of the protagonist :)

Hear, hear. -points at the comment above mine-
Let's change the layout to fit the atmosphere, muffin. :D

I liked how you stopped writing your author's note at the bottom though; very much in tone with the story. In addition, I was glad to see some progress with this story. And yes yes, I saw the references to A Walk to Remember and whatnots. -cough- -cough-. :D

Continuing, I like how you gave a reason as to why the protagonist is cutting herself, and why she feels it benefits her, but do you think you could delve more into why she's cutting herself? I mean what is it about her mom that's encouraging her to inflict pain on herself?

In addition, I'd like to know more about the character herself, and her connection with the outside world. I'm sorry, but right now, she's just talking a lot about how her mom is the source of her problem(s). I think it'd be realistic if she were feeling a variety of pressure.

But, I do like that you've let the character feel safe writing in her "journal", using slangs and terms that only herself or people who know her would know.

So yeaah, I'm growing fond of this character. If you could mold her more, and let us see more into her, (perhaps even give us a connection with her) that'd be more than fantastic.

Keep up the good work, muffin.
Extra long comment for yah! :)

PS - <3

So I shall be a silent reader no more, my friend.
First off, I must say, well done. You're actually doing something.
Second, I don't like the layout. personally, I don't like the font. It makes my eyes hurt.

I kind of don't like some of the ways that you're describing the situation. It's a little too...I'm not going to say cliche, because that isn't the right word...but it's not really precise. I mean, I am a cutter, so I know how the MC should feel...and it's kind of not really like that. It is, but it isn't...does that make sense?

Subscribing :)

And I was right to be excited for the first chapter. :D
-cough- I see you've changed the layout. -cough-

I love how raw the emotions are. And how the grammar, and phrasing reflects the thoughts and actions of a tortured sixteen year old girl. This is kind of just raw beauty. Keep it comin'. I feel for the girl. ;A;

The only complaint that I have is that this is too short. I petition that the next chapter should be longer! :O!

And I was right to be excited for the first chapter. :D
-cough- I see you've changed the layout. -cough-

I love how raw the emotions are. And how the grammar, and phrasing reflects the thoughts and actions of a tortured sixteen year old girl. This is kind of just raw beauty. Keep it comin'. I feel for the girl. ;A;

The only complaint that I have is that this is too short. I petition that the next chapter should be longer! :O!

That was reall good. It felt like I was reading the diary of a tortured person. I hope you have more chapters coming, cause I would love to read more. You left me curious of what else could be in the diary.

Can I just say that was the most scariest thing by you that I've read?
The layout was haunting; your words had a different atmosphere to them and I sincerely believed that they were actually real words from a sixteen year old girl.

Your writing has vastly improved, and my heart is still kind of accelerating LOL.
I'm REALLY excited for the first chapter. ._.

Seriously.

._.