Name Game - Comments

I really like this story. Becasue it's true.

Nothing to change <3

The ugly truth >.> people get shunned and bullied because of what they love. I thought this was true, realistic, and well worded. Though it would be nice if there were a layout with this...I still loved it <3 You're a fantastic writer you know that?

I am kinda sad that they're isnt much of a layout :/
but at least you centered it! i like it better when things are centered
Okay, so there all in a classroom, and they're friends?
oh gosh, someone is gonna be mean because shes gay,
thats ridiculous, i seriously hate people who do that
who cares that she has a girlfriend? shes happier that way,
and i think that she can be happy with whoever she wants to be
but , kids are seriously brutal when it comes to that kind of stuff
gosh i feel so bad for lily, nobody deserves that :/
thats a really good ending, and i bet she will find somebody :]

You should really use better spacing and a better layout like I said about your other story. If you're not sure how to make good layouts, ask someone (or ask me) and I'm sure someone will be glad to help you. <3 This story really took my breath away. It's so wonderful and so fast paced. Well done! <3

this was pretty good. (;

Like EverRose said, I like how you left the reader blind in the beginning. I think it allowed Leah's words to have much more of an impact.

I think taking a simple game and making it have so much meaning was a great idea.

I felt bad for Leah through most of the story, until the end when you pointed out the differences in her life. It is nice to see a lead character be strong.

At first I wasn't sure where the story was going. You left the reader blind in the begining and I liked that.

The world is lonely place for all those that are judged and judging. It sucks that people get ridiculed because of who they like. I think what I liked most was that you took something that happens everyday and made into...hope.
Also liked how you took a simple childs game and made it a big player in the story. Only thing is I wish you had a layout. :/

Amazing.

:}

This was sad. It was nice, and there were quite a few mistakes in it though. but nothing to big! Right after "dialouge" You are not supposed to have an upper case letter! That's something I just leaned too XD This was good. Again, maybe go over, read it again, edit it, and seperate the paragraphs more clearly, and this might be even better than amazing! This was great. i like your style of writing! BRAVO!

Honestly, I hate it when a great story doesn't have a nice layout to go with it. But this great story totally canceled out the fact that it doesn't have a layout xD Anyways, I really like this. Everyone is so cruel in this; it makes it real, though. It was terribly hard to read it as I was bullied alot when I was a freshman and reading stuff like this brings back alot of horrid memories that I've already - and gladly - forgotten.
Lovely job on this (: