Just A Day - Comments

This was really good. I love how you could really feel the emotions of the characters (I've been saying that a lot today, haven't I? >.>) without being bombarded with too much description.

I also like that you left the ending open for interpretation. Usually I'm not a big fan of stories that end that way, because it's led up to a point where you know what they want you to think, but it seems like they're almost too afraid of the backlash to actually go through it, so they leave it "open". It doesn't feel that way here though- I could easily come up with different ways to end it without seeming like it went against the rest of the story.

You did a really good job. :]

Made me cry thinking about what it would be like losing the love of my life :( xx

That was so sad, but I did like the idea. Wonderful<3

Make sure that this happens:
"I like pansies, they're my favourite animal," she smiled.

Instead of:
"I like pansies, they're my favourite animal." She smiled.

It's a mibba rule thingy.

Oh this was so sad. I took it the wrong way because my brother is severing in the war right now so I know how it feels to get that call. It's the worst feeling in the world to feel like you've lost your everything just by one phone call. I loved the story though it was really cute, good job. I could feel their love honestly. :)

So I really liked the idea of this. There were a few grammar and spelling mistakes but not too many. I feel like you could have organized this a little bit better, maybe told it through alternating between flashbacks of her and Ben together and post-receiving the letter/phone call instead of following the sequence of events.

Regardless I really liked this, and I liked how you left it up to the reader what happened in the end.