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  • You End I.

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    These were all so good :] You're a great writer!
    July 24th, 2008 at 04:52pm
  • Rawrlicious.

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    i like heathers story :D
    May 27th, 2008 at 12:46am
  • arizona skies.

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    loved it, Daryl,
    but you know that because I just told you.
    <33
    May 26th, 2008 at 12:41pm
  • Starless City;

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    AH :D
    i so loved it Daryl!
    you are so flipping amazing!!
    May 26th, 2008 at 08:39am
  • careless.

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    I love your Brendon oneshot! It was ah-mazing. Just like you.
    April 13th, 2008 at 10:51pm
  • Rawrlicious.

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    I LOVE IT AND IT HAS MEEE IN IT YAY YAY YAY!!! xD
    April 13th, 2008 at 05:26pm
  • Starless City;

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    AMAZING like always :]
    April 12th, 2008 at 11:39pm
  • careless.

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    DARYLLL! I LOVED IT!!! almost as much as I love you!
    March 31st, 2008 at 01:48am
  • Michelle.

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    woo! I lOVED IT. =] =]
    March 29th, 2008 at 11:33pm
  • Starless City;

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    aw that was really cute :D
    March 29th, 2008 at 09:18pm
  • stay gone;

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    awh, forever and alwasy was really cute <3
    March 29th, 2008 at 04:10am
  • Starless City;

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    I loveee the Brendon One Shot, great job on it Daryl, the parts about Jon were so funny, that so made my day, keep up the great work :D
    February 18th, 2008 at 03:58am
  • folie a dru.

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    I read What It Means to Be Pretty. Odd.
    [I assume it's meant to be 'Pretty', but there's a typo so it says 'Petty'.]

    I liked the general description in the first part of the story, when the girl is walking around listening to her iPod on Valentines' Day. It seemed very natural and it flowed well. The mention of the iPods being their downfalls also was a nice line.

    I'm not a fan of het, but I can appreciate it when written well. This was written all right, to me. I thought Ryan's speech was rather forced. The vocabulary chosen didn't seem very natural to me. I know Ryan's a writer and a genius, but I didn't think the vocabulary choice was very fitting to him.

    But, still, your descriptions and general writing were very good. I really liked your characterization of the girl, especially. Except for Ryan's vocabulary, I thought it all flowed really well. Like I said, I'm not a fan of het, but if you wrote slash I would probably read it. You have a very clear writing voice. It's nice. Your choice of pairings just aren't my cup of tea is all. :]
    February 18th, 2008 at 03:41am
  • sullen riot.

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    Because Bands Hate America.

    Alright, to be frank, I found this story a bit.. lacking. It's good, but it seems shallow, in the way that you don't delve into either the emotional or the physical aspect of the story.
    I think that you really need to "show, not tell". For example, Bob went to the store would be much more interesting if it were written as Bob walked through the busy town streets and into the store.

    However, I really really liked some parts of your story. I thought that you really were great at writing dialog, it seemed natural and unforced. Here's my favorite part of the story..

    Even if it seemed like they all ended with happy endings, Holly knew the true reason Disney movies have credits. They placed them there so that whoever is watching doesn’t know what happens after that, they don’t know that the ending isn’t happy. They don’t know the life that is happening behind the credits.
    February 6th, 2008 at 05:35am
  • Surrealistfemme.

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    I really like the Last Snow.

    It made me smile, I love romance. You gave the character's both flaws and assets. A very important part to being a writer.
    (:
    February 3rd, 2008 at 10:19pm
  • Coin-Operated Angel

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    Amazing. Amazing. I loved it.
    January 27th, 2008 at 04:16am
  • Michelle.

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    I loved the starbucks oneshot for heather. hehe.

    You're so amazing. =]
    January 22nd, 2008 at 01:34am
  • Rawrlicious.

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    I like it! And it has my name....heehee...

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    January 7th, 2008 at 09:17am
  • Kiss.My.Sass

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    LOVE ITT!
    <3

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    January 6th, 2008 at 06:41am
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