Ok, firstly, I'm sorry but I'm very busy at the moment with study and so I cannot review a fell-length story for you simply because I don't have the time. Also, it would be unfair to the other prize-winners. Thank you for asking though, I'm just sorry I can't do it.
In regards to this story, the first thing I have to say is the name Wilbur. It just fits so perfectly with this story. And the final introduction of the protagonist 'Ada' is also really well-fitting, and I think that those somewhat unusual character name choices really helped break this story out of the 'cliche' department.
Some of the descriptions in the story, although good descriptions, described rather mediocre scenes which kind of negated integrity from the story. For example, "It held secrets like no other and watched silently, nodding in approval and smiling warmly at us. It had grown up into a big tree already, standing tall among the field of delicate wild flowers." The personification really highlights this description, but the field of flowers seems a bit standard, if you know what I mean. It's not something horrible that really jumps out or anything, but just as part of a critical review I thought I'd mention it.
There's a great sense of character that drives this oneshot. Sometimes reminiscent stories can get a bit boring, without a climax or anything, but I think that the level of feeling created in this piece remains intriguing in a simple way through the language used.
In regards to this story, the first thing I have to say is the name Wilbur. It just fits so perfectly with this story. And the final introduction of the protagonist 'Ada' is also really well-fitting, and I think that those somewhat unusual character name choices really helped break this story out of the 'cliche' department.
Some of the descriptions in the story, although good descriptions, described rather mediocre scenes which kind of negated integrity from the story. For example, "It held secrets like no other and watched silently, nodding in approval and smiling warmly at us. It had grown up into a big tree already, standing tall among the field of delicate wild flowers." The personification really highlights this description, but the field of flowers seems a bit standard, if you know what I mean. It's not something horrible that really jumps out or anything, but just as part of a critical review I thought I'd mention it.
There's a great sense of character that drives this oneshot. Sometimes reminiscent stories can get a bit boring, without a climax or anything, but I think that the level of feeling created in this piece remains intriguing in a simple way through the language used.
Overall, good job on this oneshot.