Sometimes: A Rose - Comments

It was okay, not really my taste and I got confused by the writing styel quite a bit. But I suppose that it was still pretty good if I look at if objectively and don't think about the characters...

This was soooo adorable.<3
I didn't notice any writing mistakes and this had a nice flow. (:
Everything was smooth and the details were nice. :)

I have to admit I'm not a fan of the Jonas's, but I really did love this story.<3 C:
It was so sweet and cute, and detailed.<3
Amazing. :D

I was a little confused with the whole italic things, but I really liked it. You have a new writing style that I haven't seen and I'm curious about it, you are really good and I like the way you phrase things. All this needs is a little touch up and it will be perfect. Awesome job!!! :)

I love this. It was perfect to read and just sink in to.
"there’s no limit to how many times you can bring someone up and knock them down. No limit until they learn distrust." - it had a lot of golden moments like that in ;}
Noice!

I actually really liked this. It was sweet and it held a message. I also agree with the first commenter. And other than a few mistakes (that aren't a big deal at all) it was a very well written story.

This was so cute!
I did notice a few mistake, more with the skipping around with words, and forgetting material words such as and, or it, but they weren't very noticable.
I'm not a big Jonas fan, but this was adorable. The narrator made this story different, and I enjoyed that.
I like how you discribed Demi and Joe. I think you did a great job.
Well done :)

I agree with the comment above. I believe this story could turn into a huge hit and be very cute. The way you described things as the narrator made the story unique and it's own. I loved it.

I read both chapters of this and it has a lot of potential to be something. I love Joe and Demi here, it was sad and I've read many other stories dealing with this type of issue and this was no different. I loved the italics narrator's thoughts I'm guessing...everything about them. The tone and descriptions. They were my favorite part.