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Author [Smatkins]
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deactivate1
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If you're still writing this:
I think it has potential, you just need to take care of how your sentences flow. It seems very rushed. I'm not saying you need to write more or anything, but it just needs something else.
:)
January 29th, 2011 at 05:23pm
requiem.
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I uh... I'm sure it's a great story but it's kind of hard to read with the background.
November 22nd, 2010 at 02:26am
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i like this story and im the first comment
October 16th, 2010 at 03:50am
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I think it has potential, you just need to take care of how your sentences flow. It seems very rushed. I'm not saying you need to write more or anything, but it just needs something else.
:)