When Loving You Becomes Too Much for Me to Bare - Comments

I like this a lot! =D But like What'sHerName said, the layout is really hard to read. I'd change it if I were you =]
I'm looking forward to read more! =D

Hey, great start, but watch the layout... its quite hard to read.. just fix it before someone reports you. Somebody reported one of mine and its just so RUDE because there was nothing wrong with it! Just make the text either brighter so it stands out or a bit darker for this story I think, and you'll be fine.
Also, another little bit of con-crit, double check your spelling, and proof-read to check for typo's. A few places you put 'her' instead of 'he'. This is looking pretty good..... I'm subscribing! More soon? xx

YAY! FIRST COMMENT! *woot* love it!!!!