Peter Pan and Poohsticks - Comments

I like your summary. It intrigues me.

I think the 'Peter Pan Syndrome' and 'Wendy Dilemma' are interesting name to call their behaviors. ^_^ Mirth is just too cute and I really love the way you describe what's going on inside his head.

Both endings are amazing and sweet in their own kind of way. I love this kind of open endings. Like, they're not totally declaring their love for each other but we can feel that it's there. It leaves a lot for the readers to think through after reading this story.

I think you had done such a terrific job! This is one of the sweetest fiction I'd ever read. Kudos to you! ^_^

Beautiful. :)

That's so cute! *thumbs up*

aww both ends were absolutely adorable. I'm a sucker for happy endings but I almost think the ambiguous one was better. There was so much potential for them=] The way its all written is so genuine and amazing. I loved it!

Aww, what just happeneddd. These are two so different endings!
In the original one it felt like Lucas realized that Mirth might be the one worth his love.
In the new one... the thing that won is the bond they share, doesnt matter what name they'd call it.
I dont know which one I like more and which one less :p

So I really really loved this. I love Mirth even if I don't like his name :p I know excactly how mirth felt. I was in private school until the 5th grade. I didn't know anything about sex or sex jokes or jelly bracellets and I believed in Santa for the longest time. I was so so innocent until middle school. I know the feeling of unreturned love as well. I can relate to this story perfectly. And I really love Lucas too he seems like a good friend kind of like my bestfriend the social butterfly and the the social caterpillar. So yeah really great story I hope you win.

So, first off, I'd like to congradulate you on placing third in the Slashy Song Contest :D
Now, for your first of your three detailed comments:
I plainly loved this. The characters where lovely. They stuck to who they where nicely.
I don't believe I saw any grammatical errors, which is pretty amazing. I love your writing.
You're one of my favorite mibba writers :3
I loved the layout.
I don't get what the quote was saying, so I can't say much there on that front O:
So, not much detail, I know, but, it's a comment, right?
I did love this and it was amazing!
(I'm also part of this contest, too :3)
:D

I don't have quotes from the story prepared to write about them (there's just too many and this comment would have kilometres) so I'll be just overall.
I loved the way you used the quote for the story. I started to read in hope it will be a good read, since the quote sounds great, and I got caught in the story immediately. The character of Mirth is intriguing. The way he thinks, how he's different. This story, and this I have to point out, flows amazingly. It just works, paragraph after paragraph, it's completely natural and you shift in time without any difficulty. I loved the way the quote the story starts with was later mentioned within the actual conversation.
The conversations in the story are my favorite part, I'd say. They sound very believable... and are far from cliche. I just generally like how this whole story is far from cliche. Characterization of Mirth was great, so was the one of Lucas. And their friendship which grew into more. Also the feelings of boy who feels unrequited love, and is afraid of confessing it in fear of rejection... and the feelings of loneliness that come from it even when he's around his friend sometimes.
This story, for me, is amazing especially in how it points attention at the uniqueness of a human being. Not just uniqueness but also how different it makes you. Yet, despite of how we all are such originals, there is the possibility of falling in love, of finding someone who not neccessarily thinks like we do, but understands us ( or better said, learns to understand). That's the real cure for loneliness the uniqueness causes.
I liked what you said... how many people are just imitations of their family or friends. That's right. But also Lucas and Mirth, they were each other's imitation.... had influence on each other (for example how Mirth talked influenced also Lucas' vocabulary around him).
Maybe my favorite thing about the whole story is the character of Mirth. And really, if I was to quote my favorite parts, ti would be usually something concerning especially him, and it would be so many quotes. This is maybe because in a way I feel related to him. I think that in general, it's not hard to find yourself in the story. Everyone of us feels like Mirth sometimes. LIke an alien... or like the others are the aliens.
But everything is so much better if you have someone like Lucas by your side.
As for the ending, yup I'd welcome if it was... more detailed or so. In this way it felt a little abrupt. Just a little bit more would be nice :] Not much more needed, really. I like that in the end their eyes open and it ends happily.... :]
As this is a contest entry, I wish you a lot of luck in it :]

D'awwww the ending is so cute! Maybe not angsty as would be awesome, but adorable. Epilouge, yes?

D'awhhhhhhh c:

This is so cute :)