(I'll Love You) Forever and Always - Comments

This really is heartbreaking. I love that you show both sides to the story as well, both Elly-May's and Mark's renditions and reactions to the separate pieces of news are both really emotional in their own way. Like someone else said, I'd have loved to see this as a fully-blown story because having him as her guardian angel is really cute and I'd have loved to see how they would interact, if they had interacted at all, or how Mark would have gone about it. I think that would have been interesting to read.

There are a few minor grammar errors here and there (I think someone else mentioned the comma after your dialogue) but those can be easily fixed with a quick read-through!

I'll be announcing the winners of the contest later on tonight, so good luck!

I'm confused as to why the memory was repeated again at the end. And plus, she won't be sad when she's with him in Heaven- so why is he so mournful? I like the way Michael was portrayed, as well as Heaven. Very creative.

Both chapters were cute but sad at the same time. I wish you kept on going woh this story, I'd love to read how their relationship goes as he is her guardian. Overall this was great and I hope you win that contest! Also, layout was simple. I love the headline pictures. It fit the story well, good job!

Chapter one- Oh wow, that was really sad. :( The punctuation at the end of your dialogue should be edited, though. If you're going to have a tag after your dialogue, you should end it with a comma, question mark, or exclamation point- or even a dash, in certain cases.

Chapter two- Even as an angel I wanted to move around, to not want to stay still for a number of minutes; something Elly-May found cutefully annoying and would always sit on my lap or in-between my legs whenever we were watching a movie as her way of trying to make me stop. Shouldn't "angel" be "human" here? Or am I just reading it wrong?

This was really sad (and really good). I love how you depicted their angel wings- I really felt like I could see them. You did a fantastic job. :]

I’ve been eager to read your story since the pictures you choose, you don’t see their faces. It’s just them and beautiful scenery. I don’t really like your layout, but I’ve seen far, far worse ones so it’s not too bad.

I really like how you used the individual pictures as the banners to the chapters. That’s pretty unique itself and also helps note whose point of view it’s in.

My heart just about shattered into pieces when I read that he had died just three weeks after he had proposed to her. It was too sad, like I felt her pain.

I’m not a religious person at all, but I found it so utterly romantic when he was made her guardian angel. It’s sad that he has to watch over her as she dies, but at least in the end they can be together.

By the way, I seriously recommend you read Hush, Hush by Becca Fitzpatick. It’s sort of similar to this.
http://www.beccafitzpatrick.com/hushhushstory.html

I'll bite. I'm guessing, but I won't post it for fear of guessing right and ruining it for future commenter... XD