Birds - Comments

I like this because it was very realistic.

How he likes to watch the birds sit, but you like to see them fly. The contrast of those two things being the first and last lines is really catching, and it adds to the story a lot.

And how the conversation is strained and there isn't much to it, it makes it more real than if they had a long, in depth conversation with ease.

Very well done.

I liked it alot, the part that really got to me was the "I loved watching birds in the sky." It seemed so random but at the same time connected and needed. I loved this whole piece

This reminds me of that RP you sent me to read.

I love the little bit of dialogue in the parentheses of the sun talking to the sky. I also love the "smack and popper" thing. Popper almost seemed like a made up word, but one that fit, perfectly. The minimal dialogue between the characters is so heart-breaking, but so realistic.

This is a comment, not a review. Forgive me. I've been up for about twenty minutes, I think.

this is lovely, i feel such a sense of serenity when reading this.
you are an amazing writer :)