Monsoon Wings - Comments

comment swap sent me here, I read the first and part of the second chapter but it was kinda hard to get through cause of the story layout. It kinda killed my eyes haha but if you were ever able to change it to something more easy on the eyes, i would be more then happy to continue reading and give you a better comment on what i think. =]

Ahhhh!! i loved it! i just read the entire thing in one sitting!

2 new chapters! Sorry for delay, had a crazy life lately.

love it :D can't wait for the rest !!!!

New update :)

more more more pleaseeeee
~elly

awwwww poor Juno. She was actually starting to like him and then her best friend comes along.

When I said what happened, I meant what did he supposedly do to her. What did the parchment say?

Yay! I'm so happy I get the chance to read this story again. I really like the way you write. I'm sad that it seems like I'm more like Olivia but I just imagine that I'm actually like Juno haha. Lovely story!

I'm confused. What happened?

i cant believe i forgot how awesome this story was!
~elly

I really like this story! I am so excited to see where its gonna go. I can't wait to read more.

For starters I like the summary, especially "But love is like a helpless, neglected plant left in a yard--- it blossoms unexpectedly." Absolutely lovely.
I love your writing style, it's very smooth. You seem to effortlessly incorporate poetic lines. For the most part the dialogue is realistic. I've seen so many Harry Potter fics where the dialogue is incredibly forced and fake and it makes the story hard to read, you do a lovely job of keeping it realistic.
This story is really fun to read and I like it :)

I haven't started reading your sotry yet... but what caught my attention was the title... i use to be a quizilla member until i got a virus from there site and i use to read a story with this title and i was wondering if it is the same one. Even if it isn't im still gunna read it :)
~elly

Got this in the comment swap...I read the first three chapters.

I'm sure you're going to change the background of your layout. I'm not real crazy about the banner, it seems a little too much for me. Perhaps without all the text...

Very interesting summary though. I'm quite curious to see where this goes. :)

I like your beginning paragraph of the first chapter. Its very descriptive, very poetic. The fact that she's in a wheelchair is unexpected. I like it! And Draco seems so sweet and...enticing. x) You have a few small typos in here, but nothing too distracting.

a grumpy, small building. I like that. Its a good visual of a building you'd find in Diagon Alley.

In the third chapter, you start with third person, but then continue with "we..." Ugh, Draco can be such a prick. -.- A charming prick, but nonetheless, a prick.

This story seems a lot of fun to read, though you might want to work on your setence structure. This story has promise. :)

Best of luck!

Yeay thank you :)

It's a little bit better yes I will start reading and when I am done ill coment :)

Sorry! I'll fix it rightaway.

To be honest I am trying to read this but cant the layout is very distracting I can't see the words ... I really want to read this

Actually that makes sense. I thought of it also. Hahaha. So it just goes that no magic can mend the bones. I know this is contradicting the magical world. Sorry for that. I also realize there are still many loopholes in my story. I'm working to fix the plot. Thank you for mentioning that :)