Life is a Nightmare - Comments

Sorry, scratch the first question, I miss read the summary :B update soon please!!

I really like it, I just have uhm, two questions. It's really confusing me.
1.- how is it that Emily and Kevon are brothers but lived seperatly and had thier own parents?
2.- were emily's parents killed before or after she left to the park? :O

I don't mean to be rude about it, I just really have an urge to know :B

but besides that, I LOVE IT!! :D It's different.

I love this.<3
It's great.(:

no problem,i'm glad i can help in anyway.you are a great writer though,don't let the tough criticism bother you,it shouldn't bother yoiu when the good outways the bad by more then alot

I actually love the little you have written so far,I've been looking for original stories,and I've got to say that you really do have talent as A writer.there is so many thing's that i loved about the story,i liked the desciptions,a story is always better when it has meaningful details about stuff the reader actually cares about,which yours has.That being said I want to point out the very slight things i didn't like without seeming like A jerk.While the details were great,i felt like i was too distant from the main characters,i wanted to get to know them alittle more,i wanted a better picture of them while i read.I didn't think the story was too slow at all,i think it's keeping A great pace,and I like the suspense,but(of course i have to add one more thing)there is still un used room for even more suspense,and alittle shockingly scary,or at least thrilling writing in this chapter...i can't wait for the next chapter.if you dont mind check my story out when you get a chance"Slow Burn"..thanks