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  • Leelo13

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    @ ebonyhailey
    Thanks so much for the feedback! This was my first attempt at third person, so it's nice to hear that I was able to make it work. And I'm glad someone finally said something about the layout. I didn't even think about how that might affect the reader's enjoyment. Again, thank you so much!
    February 21st, 2014 at 06:48am
  • emilypaget

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    This story is honestly brilliant. I love the way you write, and if there are any errors in the writing, it didn't interrupt the flow of the story. I do have to admit I'm not a fan of the layout - it actually turned me off the story, as well as the lack of a description. Just the title is honestly not enough to capture my attention. The fact that you write in the third person is something i don't see very often and that you carried it off is spectacular. I am curious why you changed your chapter heading pattern, but that's more of a peculiarity. And Staasly is such an odd name! Hopefully the rest of your stories are just as good, because this one is definitely beautiful and carries its quality well.
    January 5th, 2014 at 09:41am
  • helloxellen

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    I'm in love with how this ended, but I can't believe it's over! :/ Amazing job,<333.
    November 21st, 2011 at 08:17am
  • dreamerforever

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    Perfect ending. It was lovely. I'm gonna miss this!
    November 13th, 2011 at 03:57am
  • dreamerforever

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    Poor Jordy...that must've been a good dream. lol.
    October 31st, 2011 at 05:30am
  • dreamerforever

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    She called him back! Yay!
    October 30th, 2011 at 12:41am
  • dreamerforever

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    Loved that chappie. I had trouble not smiling and laughing, at least a little bit.
    October 28th, 2011 at 09:34pm
  • dreamerforever

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    Great chapter, yet I can't help but wonder who the hell that is. Everyone's thinking that...yeah, what a way to state the obvious. lol
    October 26th, 2011 at 12:52am
  • dreamerforever

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    Ooh...Jordan likes Simone.
    October 19th, 2011 at 07:30pm
  • dreamerforever

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    It was a great chapter and it was funny! I'm looking forward to what's gonna happen next.
    October 12th, 2011 at 06:14am
  • dreamerforever

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    It's been so long. I really liked that. I'm so glad Jordan realize who Simone really was.
    September 23rd, 2011 at 07:08pm
  • dreamerforever

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    It's been so long. I really liked that. I'm so glad Jordan realize who Simone really was.
    September 23rd, 2011 at 07:08pm
  • dreamerforever

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    That was great as usual!
    April 19th, 2011 at 09:12pm
  • dreamerforever

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    That was such an enjoyable chapter! I loved it.
    April 11th, 2011 at 07:23am
  • dreamerforever

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    Hmm...
    April 1st, 2011 at 06:32am
  • dreamerforever

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    Here's hoping she tells him soon. *crosses fingers*
    March 14th, 2011 at 09:42pm
  • dreamerforever

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    Things are getting even more interesting.
    March 13th, 2011 at 02:10am
  • dreamerforever

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    Glad all is good. The fact that Jordie is one of her emergency contacts is cute.
    March 5th, 2011 at 02:41am
  • dreamerforever

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    Hmm...that's what I was thinking. lol. Wondering who Jeff is.
    February 17th, 2011 at 07:45am
  • dreamerforever

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    I wasn't expecting that chapter, but I enjoyed reading it.
    February 15th, 2011 at 01:59am
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