I'll Take What I Want From Your Heart - Comments

hehehe! I re-read this story and it made me love it even more :D

Hi there, you entered this in for the One True Pairing contest!
Of course, my main pairing has been Frank and Gerard for about, what, ugh, five years? So, yours was one of the first that I went to read.

This was a beautiful piece, and I think you should be really proud of yourself!
I think that the Poison and Venom were definitely creative, and you incorporated them into the song lyrics so well, it was really cute and made me 'awww' out loud a few times.

Honestly, I think that there is that fine line between fitting the characters as people and creating a Mary Sue; don't be afraid to put other flairs and quirks into your Frank and Gerard!
For example, when Gerard goes out to buy his art supplies, you could throw in something like, 'batteries for the remote control Frank always wore out', or something -- to make their relationship seem more genuine, you know?
I think you definitely have the talent to make really original Frank and Gerards~~

The way it ended was ... satisfying. I feel like a bad person saying that, but I hate it when Frerard fictions either end in a horrible, horrible break up or a really gooshy make up. You did both!

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This is great, thank you for entering!!

That is such a bittersweet story it is so good yet such a sad bitter ending I loved it!

you are an awesome writer nonnie!!!!!!!!!!!!! and an awesome friend!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Last sentence. *sob* So sad!! Very well written!! <3

I'll start with the layout, it was readable but not having a solid background behind the text strained my eyes a little.

The fourth paragraph, seemed like it could flow better with more description.

"Naw, never babe," Gerard replies, pecking a quick kiss upon his lovers lips. "They ain't got the poison you got." That just sounds so Frerard and so cute I can't even stand it! I read that in Gerard's voice and it just sounded perfect.

The first chapter was just so cute. Their poison and venom, amazing.

Second chapter, not such a cute start. :( I hope that Gerard is just planning something super cute for Frank or something.

Frankie Boo. Just so cute.

Oh my god. I hope that Gerard isn't like fucking someone else. Poor Frankie.

Chapter three, I know that situation too well. Frank is surprisingly calm about it.

That was so sad. I love how you blended the whole thing together. The fans, the band, their relationship. That was honestly incredible. Grammar and spelling were amazing. You followed the rules. :] Overall it was very good.

We can always hope huh (: I really liked this xo