You Lost Me - Comments

@ Jojo657
Thank you

I like it a lot

:) you got the proposal from Mine-Taylor Swift, right? I loved it but sooo sad. I almost cried. Poor asshol-ish Cris! :'(

Can't believe I never read this before! I am BAD. But this was really good. I adore a good tragedy and this hit all the right strings. However, you might want to change '100 Wyatt' to '100 Watt'. Just a pointer. Otherwise, keeping in mind what Terminally Chill says, it's great! Esp. the happy parts, they're really cute.

omg. okay. first i'd just like to say thank you for your story comment
on my own CR story :) haha. second. thanks for sending me to check out
this story of yours :) third. i hate you for making it sad! lol. jkjk.

but seriously though...XD i thought this was very well written (despite some
of the same things i noticed as terminally chill up there ^^) i love how you
made it a nonconventional "unhappy ending" i mean, as much as i love
happy ones...the sadder ones just appeal more to me. haha. idk why. and
the characters were well established for just one chapter :)

great job girlllll :D

This was so sad! I feel really bad for Cristiano, if Cristiano was my husband, I'd probably cave in xD I'm glad though that you didn't make it a cliche happy ending. I think Maxine made the right choice, I don't think you should ever give cheaters a second chance, because once they break your trust, it's like you can never trust them the same way again. I do love the fact that you gave a flashback on their engagement. I could have fallen in love with Cristiano, he was so sweet! I really wished he hadn't pulled off such a stupid thing like cheating.

a small typo here though: I started to pick up random things and chucking them across the room. --> "chucking" should be "chucked" I think it makes the wording stronger, but I'm not sure if that's just me.

I sank down onto my butt and wrapped my arms around my legs crying my eyes out. --> the paragraph was really strong and emotional, and I just don't feel like "butt" fit in. I guess you could change it into, "I sank down onto the floor...." ? It's up to you though.

Oh my my my, I read this and it was really good! I thought the ending was sad but
it made me want to read more so then I know what happens next! (: