Crystal Bowls - Comments

I am in awe. I love how you took something so simple and compared it to something so deep. I could almost picture everything going on in her head. It was definitely one of the best pieces that I've ever seen. Great job :)

You write so nicely! It made me think of a hundred things in my life that I can relate to.
I thought of my friend who is bipolar, shes bouncy when she's sad and I just though of her and now I'm going to call her to make sure she is okay.
The layout seemed fine to me, the writing was done so it could be read easily and it fitted properly.
I liked it :]

The background of the layout is beautiful. I love the cracked glass look. It’s beautiful! My critique comes with the font colors. I think blue against blue is sort of hard to see and the blue is a little too bright to use as a background. Also, the titles are hidden because of how dark the blue background is.

She is unloading dishes from the dishwater, she is opening the cabinet and putting dishes in.
The mistake is throughout the whole thing. Instead of the first punctuation being a comma, I think a semicolon would work better there, or at least add a conjunction like ‘and now’ or something.

She shouldn’t work.
I like the metaphor. I think it’s really personal and well-thought out. It’s abstract and new—something that I haven’t heard before and it’s amazing.

I really like the structure and set up of it. The way that you keep bringing back the bowls—something that we see all the time; every day—and connect it in a way that most people wouldn’t think of.

Truly, I love this whole idea. The writing is brilliant. <3

Don’t call her sick. She doesn’t like to be called sick. She is notsick.

Again, you've blown my mind.
Your writing is deep, and it gets me thinking.
I really enjoy that. <3

How does this not have more comments on it?
Seriously.

Keep up the good work! :D

Ok, I gotta say I really like it.
It seemed, like, really real,
I could relate.

Things I didn't like:
The layout was a bit distracting, but then again, my personal preference is as minimal as possible.
And spaces after italics.

It was very good =]

I'm not very fond of the layout, I don't really like the background. It doesn't fit with the background of the story part. And at first, I thought it a little weird to write a drabble like this but then as I started to read more, I got into it and it made me think about this girl.

I like how you compared the girl to the crystal bowls, and just that one little tap can break her and make her fall apart. The repetition you have in your drabble ('The bowls are she and she is the bowls', and how you say almost a lot) makes it all very effective and doesn't make it sound boring. You've written a lot about this girl and it could almost say her whole personality and everything that's about her.

I think you should change the layout, and also edit your story and put spaces after the italic almost's in the second paragraph. Everything's good. :D

Brilliant!!! It made me think!!!!

Not fond of the layout, but overall this was fantastic. For real, it's so beautifully well written. I can tell some thought was put into this and I adore the concept and meaning behind it. It flowed perfectly and I was very impressed. AMAZING job. <3

I don't really like how the layout and the background go together. It's contrasts too much for the lack of better words.

But on the other hand, I really loved this piece. "They tumble apart and away. For a moment, I was all like "Nooo. Something bad happened to her." I'm glad nothing did in the end. Although knowing that all she needs is one little tap for it to really happen, is not so much of the good news either. I really loved how you compared the crystal bowls and the main character and made them one. The repetition added a nice little effect to the flow of the story and it showed how big the situation and the problem it really was. Anyways, this was beautiful.

I have to say that I found this very interesting. At first I was iffy, not because of the layout but because of the tense this was written. It normally flows awkwardly for me, but I do love the comparison to crystal bowls. It was so...unique, like I don't know I love how fragile she seemed.

I loved that you kept emphasizing the word 'almost' to keep the flow of the story going. That was sort of clever to me. The bowls are she and she is the bowls. This line made her seem delicate and easily broken. It was also an odd line, which I loved. Only 300+ words? This was a wonderful drabble my deary.

First off, I couldn't read the story with your background. I was forced to use the default layout so I could read this.
I like how everything built up in the story, how we got to know the girl better. I do think that you sometimes had very long sentences and that made me lose the plot a bit. Other than that I thought this was a good one-shot. :)

Okay, first, I don't think that the background of the story and the layout background to together very well - that is, unless you're meaning for it to look like blood against the glass. Second, I have no idea why this doesn't have a million comments on it. It's brilliant and so beautifully written. I loved this part the most: The bowls are she and she is the bowls. She shouldn’t work. Why should something like her work? She is almostdepressed. She is almostanorexic. She is almostsick. But she’s not sick, really. She’s happy sometimes. She eats, sometimes. So she can’t be sick. She’s just not…healthy, that’s all. I keep having a feeling that comparing her to the crystal bowls makes her very fragile-sounding. Maybe that's just how I see it x]
Anyways, this is really amazing. Lovely job! <3