December 1st, 2010 at 09:04am
Aw, this was so cute!
The layout was great, and I love the little blooming romance! So sweet!
You convey romance really, really amazingly, and this was no exception. I practically felt like I was sitting in the little cafe' watching them.
Great job!
Again, I love how you describe things. The description in this was different to Alive and Falling Apart To Half Time because the description here relies on a beauty from love and adoration. You put the narration in the mans voice, and you have him point out what he finds attractive in the lady - and that description makes it cute and lovely. :]
I also like your little play on addictions - that was quite well done. I, for one, never think of emotions when addiction comes to mind - so I think you've uncovered something that can be thought about. :]
Also, I love how you don't end the story as such - it could be continued if you wanted it to be, but you kind of leave it hanging at her confession of love addiction. Like, you can have a go at figuring out what happens next kinda thing. :]
It's a lovely write. :]