October 31st, 2010 at 07:19pm
The layout for this is beautiful. <3
I love your similes, the ones starting with unhappy as a... because it really makes the readers think, and it doesn't just make it seem like she's unhappy, but maybe worse than unhappy, if you get what I mean. And the descriptions you used for things are really good. Great job on this! :)
Yeah, I considered it to have some talking but still, it got better than what I thought. I edited it five times, I'm happy with it (: And once again, thank you! :D It's awesome when someone tells you that you made a great job! :)