The layout is really good. I loved how the banner matched the story so well. I think you could've made the story area the size of the picture, but it was still really good. The actual story was breathtaking. I loved how you had contrary things in one statement---"While you experienced pleasure, I experienced pain," as one example. You are an amazing writer. Good job! (:
August 18th, 2011 at 08:59pm