What She Didn't Say - Comments

Update again soon!

Are you ever gonna update this?

I really want this story to update

I wish I could give you some constructive criticism.. but wow. I don't know what else to say besides this is beautifully written. There is a few typos, but other then that I wouldn't have changed anything. The emotion and imagery is excellent, and I applaud you. :)
I'm definitely looking forward to an update!

I've only gotten through the first chapter (I'm rushing before school, procrastinating etc.) but wow. I must say, that really gave me chills. You didn't need to go into detail, in fact, leaving the detail of the deed out and focusing in on her emotional turmoil highlighted the trauma of it.

Nicely introduced too, and the dialogue flowed. I love the idea of the Cinderella comparison, it reminds us that she was just a child - innocent and naive, but also how too easily this could happen to any sweet little girl.

I just.. absolutely adore this! <3

I love this,
I really wish she would tell someone</3

"What's you name?" I asked,
I am guessing you should be your.

This is a lovely idea for a story. You have packed so many emotions into this. But in some places, I feel that you are telling and not showing us what is happening. I love how much description you have put into this; it adds to the emotion. All characters and reactions are so real; I love it, and I love this story!

This was amazing. I enjoyed reading it, and I could really feel for your main character. I agree with Sushaydance1221. This reminded me of Speak, but it also has its own unique beauty. I love your writing style, by the way. It's unique and I enjoy it.

Good job.

This story makes me want to cry. I can't begin to imagine how that whole situation would feel.
I hope things work out for her. ):

It defentialey reminds me of Speak, but I can see it already ahs its own unquie twist. I really think you should fix the the text size and color, it was very unappealing especially when everything else was great.

I'm super duper stoked for this. (:
I actually like the fact that she was seemingly in shock throughout the experience, which I personally think is a little more realistic.
I can't wait for an update. <3

There are some minor errors here, like spelling, but that's about it. Other than that, I really do like the idea of this, Courtney! Or Renee, or whatever...haha. I forget what you like to be called. But honestly, I love your ideas with this, it's a great start and you've done a great job so far. I can see just how upset she was, just how nervous. It comes through in your writing. Amazing chapter. The only thing I could suggest is to lighten the text or the story area background up a bit because it's hard to read.