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First off, I really like how you introduced Peg. I could immediately relate to her because I'm the same way, I like to stick to my routines

Like the person above me mentioned, there are a few grammatical errors here and there, but a beta-reader could easily help you with that. Overall, the storyline seems promising, and I hope you're able to follow through with it

another small thing i couldn't remember*, sorry. :3
find a beta/read and reread before posting, maybe.

the prolouge is super cute. i love Peg's character. well, actually, the way you, as an author describe Peg, mainly because i probably couldn't stand Peg. :P
you have a few grammatical errors, "In a world of uncertainty and chance Peg was a constant."
^ there should be a comma after the word "chance", m'dear.
there was another small thing.
but primarily, i love this and i love the opposites you create in Peg and Anna's friendship. this whole thing looks like it has major chances at greatness.

I like how simple Peggy seems to be, even her name is. It's also my grandmother's name and I've always wondered why anyone would want to name their baby that. Nothing against this, but it just doesn't seem to fit anyone young and carefree!

I loved your first paragraph especially, it's wonderful. It just shows how on time and precise she really is. The simplicity of this is great. She seems like she's always on top of her game and this story really doesn't seem that repetitive - although I don't know what the plot is. Perhaps it'll show in a few chapters.

I think this is good so far - your ending was a bit abrupt, though.

Once again, silk tea. said everything. I really like the plot twist at the end. And it's not cliche at all! Gah, everyone calls their stuff a cliche now. No, it isn't. :| Anyways, I like how she's a perfectionist of sorts. I wish I was like that sometimes, haha!
Anyways, nice update :D <3

Girl you behind! It's day three and you only has the prologue? Tsk, tsk...

ANYWAY. I like what I've read so far. I don't really know what it's about...but what I've read I am interested in. I like the whole perfectionist ordeal she's got. A set amount of time to everything. Wonder if that's like OCD? That would suck. I also love that you have the name Peg, it's a name you don't see much. I adore when people use unique names for their characters. I agree with Gabby up there about liking her friend. She seems interesting. Very nice. :)

A plot really hasn't emerged through, but even the prologue is instantly likable. I can really get a feel for the main character, she's got her quirks and her schedule and it really paints a picture in my mind of what she's like. I like her because she's interesting, and there's a lot that this story can go with.

Her friend is cool too, even know you don't describe her much. Just the way she asks for the homework and is so loud I instantly like her too. And I like how for her you don't tell us that she's these things, you show it. That's a problem a lot of people have with characterization.

Though I think for Peg her character is so important that you have to tell us what she's like.

The first paragraph is a bit repetitive though, I'll admit. Anyways, I like it. Have fun for NaNo<3

Parasite basically said everything that I wanted to. x] I agree with everything she said; the writing is perfect and gorgeous. Peg sounds like an awesome character - though she reminds me of the Pekingese from Lady and the Tramp a bit xD - and I'd really love to read more about her. However, the paragraph spacing was a bit wonky here and there, but it's nothing that you can't fix (:
Lovely job so far and good luck with NaNo! <3

I love the layout just so you know. I love the banner picture. <3 You have a NaNo? Well goshness, this story is deff Nano material. It was a great start; not boring for a 300+ word prologue. I liked how you briefly explained Peg. It was simple characterization, and not a long forced detail about her. Peg was clear, concise and definable. Nicely done.