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When I first started reading and saw it was about an eating disorder, I was going to go back and find a different story. But there's something about the way you write that made me want to read more. It was really captivating and really well written.

Everything you write is so different. I really really love it. I have to agree with death to the pixies I wasn't expecting it to be about an ED. >.< But darling your writing is simply beautiful--I'm sorry this comment isn't that great I'm just kind of like...whoah. lol

I wasn't sure what this would be about at first, I was very suprised to see it was about anorexia/eating disorders in general.
I thought the idea for this was very good, and you have great potential. Like Infinite! said, rewording would make this a lot better, but I also if you changed the layout to something relevant, and made a summary it would be better.
I however, liked your metaphor about the distorted mirrors.

I agree with the vertical numbers. It is extremely distracting.
I think this idea is over done, but you did pretty well with it. I would reword some things, but it's pretty good. I liked it :)

I like how, in between the counting, there are descriptions. The fact that the counting came throughout the story, for many different reasons, was awesome. This was a very emotional short-story, and the fact that is was centered around an eating disorder, made it better. This really was good!

I really liked this. :/ But anorexia... bleh. It's just so sad.
And her brother, so typical, my family's just like that, not meaning it, but you feel like they did.
The layout, though, I didn't like it much at all. The background was unfitting and I personally don't like that font.
It feels so raw. I could relate to this, really.
But this was pretty good. I liked the counting, but making it so seperated like that was a little off-putting.
But otherwise, good job. <3

Awww, that was sad a nice all the same.
Oddly enough, I enjoy these kinds of stories.
That's shitty that her brother called her a fatass. Names really do damage. I remember my mom saying to me once after musical rehearsal in eighth grade that I was the fattest girl on stage. And all the years I went through with people telling me I was ugly...
The only problem was that I couldn't read with the layout you made so I had to change it to Default Layout.
I liked it a lot. ^^

I didn't really like the layout, however, I loved the story itself. Is this about Anorexia? That's what I got from this. I thought this was strong and sort of true for a lot teens out there who think they're fat. It was raw, though provoking, and a little sad at the end. Lovely job. :)

The lack of a summary for this really made me hesitant to actually read it. As Isadora Peirce said, the way you have the numbers is somewhat distracting and it does take away from the story.

Other than that, this was very well written. I enjoyed the emotions you conveyed and the ending was fabulous. Good job. =D

Let me point out first that it's not a good idea to have the numbers vertical. It takes away from the story, big time. Try italicizing them and then just typing them horizontally in their own line. It'll look much better.

This was slightly painful to read because while I've never had an eating disorder of sorts, I know what it's like to look in a mirror and hate my reflection. It really sucks. You captured the whole feeling, the sad emotions of it in one story. You did a great job of that too, and I liked the positive ending.

That was . . .wow. That was amazing. You did an excellent job. I loved it and it's just something to think about. Awesome job <3