Very odd. Something I wouldn't have found interesting most of the time. Except, you have such an intricate way of describing things. It's a very interesting story.
November 11th, 2010 at 03:57am
This was amazing!! It really captured all of the things that this disease is about. I really loved how you put the ticking of the clock, it only added to the story. The ending freaked me out a bit, to be honest. I loved this so much!!! You write amazingly. =D
I did find one thing, though.
Next came the plates; her hands were visibly shaking at she opened the cabinet about the counter.
I think at should be as. and about... above maybe?