Im realy starting to love this story!
June 23rd, 2011 at 12:28am
Starting Over - Comments
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Im realy starting to love this story!June 23rd, 2011 at 12:28am
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Im realy starting to love this story!June 23rd, 2011 at 12:28am
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Im realy starting to love this story!June 23rd, 2011 at 12:28am
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Im realy starting to love this story!June 23rd, 2011 at 12:28am
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Woop, I got a shoutout. And another well written chapter (though a little short), made me curious as to where her father has been that she had to wait until Trevor was gone before she could ask... Unless it’s just something simple they don’t want to bore him with...January 18th, 2011 at 05:01pm
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Oooooohhhh, my face literally went like this: :O when she went to tell Damien and Lisa was there.
Great work.December 19th, 2010 at 10:57pm -
love it!!December 15th, 2010 at 01:27am
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Put her in an arranged marriage... woahhh, not sure what I think about that.
Another good read, well written.November 30th, 2010 at 08:30pm -
Another good read, if a little short (but that could just be me wanting to read more : ) )
‘I’ seems to be a little overused in the first paragraph of ‘Big News (Part 2).’ But I shouldn’t really comment on that as I can’t think of any other words to use.
‘There was a knock on the door and Darrien came in. But someone came in behind Darrien.’ Instead of using his name again you could simply use ‘him’ as it saves on repetition and overuse of his name.
Oooh, I didn’t expect her to be pregnant, it was a nice surprise and makes me want to read on in order to find out how she copes with it, what happens with swimming, whether she keeps it.
Keep up the good work.November 25th, 2010 at 03:51pm -
cooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooool i want more! um plaze!November 23rd, 2010 at 10:51pm
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This was a good read, kept my interest and was written well though I did spot a typing error in your prologue. Keep up the good work.November 19th, 2010 at 10:57pm
