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  • myoneandonly

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    wow.
    This is so good.
    I thought the way you described stuff was absolutely amazing! I felt like I was sitting in a chair next to him. You did such a good job :)
    I loved this part-"Fixed him as if all he’d needed was a magic word or a key to a lock" - thats like, my favorite phrase out of this story.

    Great job! :D
    January 13th, 2011 at 01:20am
  • Sundance Kid.

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    The layout is neat, and simple, which I love. What I really liked about this story, though, was the fact that you took an idea that's common enough in the world, and made it your own with beautiful writing. The flow seemed a little shaky, and I think that might be because of the amount of full, and awkward words you used. Otherwise, it was a great story.
    January 13th, 2011 at 01:17am
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