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osteo-anarchist (100)

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I am highly - highly - intrigued by this! And in a good way! I've always thought about doing something like this but never quite felt up to the task (both out of sheer laziness and inability to really decide a beginning x3). But anywho! I definitely like what you've got so far and am excited for what is to come! :3

July 19th, 2011 at 07:16am

Poirot's Moustache (1270)

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Hi, I'm another judge for ayanasioux's World of Fantasy Contest. I'm looking specifically at grammar/formatting.

Your story looks fine grammar-wise. A few things I noticed:

* Some paragraphs and dialogue need to be separated - just so every time a new character speaks, the dialogue is on a new line.
* And there are some incorrect tags after dialogue. Like here: “I like that idea.” He agreed
Because 'he said' is a tag, the full-stop after 'idea' should be a comma, and 'he' doesn't need to begin with a capital letter.

March 9th, 2011 at 05:04am

Titan320 (100)

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I love this song, the story goes greatly with it.

February 12th, 2011 at 01:41am

Frozen December Moon (105)

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OH MY JESUS TOTALLY AWESOME! Totally happy to see it come to life.

February 5th, 2011 at 11:22pm

LadyStrange (100)

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Oh. my. goodness.
I love, love, love this story. It starts off just like the song....it's perfect.
I love how you can tell it's definitely influenced by Rush....and the Sci-Fi aspect of it all is beautiful.
Wonderful job, I can not wait to read more!!!! :D

February 4th, 2011 at 08:06am