The Depths of Music - Comments

sorry its not finished barely at all and I looked at it a few days ago and saw SOOOO many mistakes!!!! :/ but I could fix it up... It is just SOOOO time consuming!!!! tysvm though!!!

Dude the preface alone is pure epicness! It's incredible the way you described music ther and if this story/book is finished, you should most definetely consider trying to get it published because writers like you are like once in a lifetime and subjects that no one would ever think could turn out to be a great story is what make many books best-selling novels that inspire so many people.

Sorry, forgot some stuff......uh in the first chapter the first few sentences describing what's happening, doesn't really flow as much as I think it should, but that's just me! :D Also when you said "Click" In quotation marks, it looks like some one is saying it so I would say it like this...-A door cliked open behind the girl, making her jump slightly- or something along those lines. Hope that helped you! ;)

Okay, you're obviously writing in third person-limited, and all my stories are in first person, so sorry if I can't help you as much as you're helping on mine...:/..........but I thought that the words you're using to descibe everything are wonderful....(a lot of which I didn't know what they meant.....:o) But in the 2nd chapter where you intoduced the 2 girls, when they're talking, try to tell us whos talking insted of just starting off with unqestionable diolog...(hehe, that sounded smartical! :p) If you know what I mean.....hopefully! :D. But, so far I love it and I kind of think that you're a better writer than I am! :D Kudos..........(hehe)