The wall. - Comments

Okay, like silk tea. said, it sort of reads like a poem to me. Anywho, it strikes up old emotions in me. I really like how--powerful?--this is. I like the fact that it made my eyes water, and i like how the layout, though simple, went well with the story/drabble. Amazing job here! <3

Well, the first thing I need to say is you need to fix your title. >.< It needs to be capitalized like 'The Wall'. Also, I think this belongs in the poetry section. It didn't read like a story, or one shot or dribble to me it read like a poem. Not to say it wasn't lovely. I really do love the concept of it. A sort of bump in the road but feels more like a prominent wall just sucking your life over. But I really enjoy this, very...I can't think of the word. fuuu