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  • southpaw

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    This is beautiful. The way you wrote it, it sounds as though it could be a song as well as a story, and your writing flows so amazingly.
    It's so abstract, too - I like how you left it to the imagination what the specifics were. The tone change near the end from sweet to bitter was interesting as well, and I don't know if you rhymed certain things on purpose, but that was hella awesome too. It's really poetic and just...beautiful. Amazing job. :D
    June 27th, 2011 at 03:19am
  • disasterologist.

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    Holy crap, that was beautiful. I love how it's half-poem, half-story, and your imagery is stunning.
    Nice layout too. :)
    June 18th, 2011 at 11:40pm
  • DesmondTiny

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    Really enjoyed it :)
    June 18th, 2011 at 08:02pm
  • life in film.

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    Whoa! You've got some talent!
    That's amazing. I love how it rhymes every once in a while. And that it's 100 words exactly.
    The layout is really beautiful as well. Well done!
    June 18th, 2011 at 01:12pm
  • Theory of a Goblin;

    Theory of a Goblin; (100)

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    Oh my god! I love it! <3
    Ashley you really out did yourself with this story! ^-^
    But but all your work is perfect and amazing! <3
    Love ya!
    ~Your bestie
    November 27th, 2010 at 06:41pm
  • whiskey lullaby.

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    Oh, I love deceiving pieces - when they seem pretty and sweet at the beginning and end with a completely different and dark emotion. Just as with Stolen, the imagery in Puppet is stunning.

    Once again, thank you for entering, and wonderful job on this!
    November 19th, 2010 at 09:39pm
  • city lights;

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    Nicely written.
    c:
    November 19th, 2010 at 03:11am
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