Let's Not Pretend Like You're Alone Tonight - Comments

I cried like a baby withi this! I loved it!!! One of the best stories I've read in a while. I loved the way it was written, the characters & just everything about it. Great work.

This is so good, it made me cry. Definitely one of the best stories I've read here. Good job.

This was one of the best stories I've read on Mibba so far! I can see where you got this idea from the song and I think it's a creative twist on what you'd think would be your typical love song based story. The fact that it was told in the point of view from a ghost was so creative and something not many other writers can effectively do without making it seem a little unbelievable. But you did an amazing job portraying Landon accurately, considering he's not living. Even though he is dead, he still feels emotions just as strong as if he were still breathing and your writing does a really good job describing what he feels, sees, and remembers.

The little flash back you included was not only adorable but definitely helped me understand and tie their relationship together better.

The fact that Landon and Katie were communicating, without her knowing, was saddening but almost comforting knowing that as far apart as they truly are, their tight bond and love for each other still somehow keeps them communicating through life and death.

While this does segue into a ghost story that itself feels haunting and looming, the romantic aspect added in makes this story one of the few thematic doublings that, added together, transform this story into a memorable tragic love story. It's almost like an alternative take on Romeo and Juliet. Except family issues aren't keeping them apart; it's simply the division between life and death itself that makes these two star-crossed lovers.

This story definitely deserved to win first place and I believe that you are an amazing writer. I'll be sure to keep a look out for some more of your stories!

Wow...that was breathtaking.. This might be out of no where since I think you wrote this a long time ago and it's probably random, but I couldnt stop myself from commenting because you're such a good writer and you portray emotions so beautifully. Really nice job on this!

Wow...that was breathtaking.. This might be out of no where since I think you wrote this a long time ago and it's probably random, but I couldnt stop myself from commenting because you're such a good writer and you portray emotions so beautifully. Really nice job on this!

This is very good. Very emotional.
I really enjoyed reading it.
You conveyed what your characters so wonderfully that it was almost painful to read.
Great Job!

Oh my gosh THAT WAS WONDERFUL!!!!

Okay, so, like, why are to so good at writing? You make Eve Stone green with envy.

This this the shit right here. I love the story, and its just so amazingly written. Well done, chap!! Congrats Stevie on your badassery :{D

So I did cry a little. You are one of the most amazing authors here on Mibba, my Stevie-O, you deserve to win this one-shot contest and if you don't I'll make a petition out of you not winning.

Nothing better than constructive criticism, huh Marshmallow? You know my thoughts on your writing style, and you know how proud of you I am. This is by far one of the best pieces you've written and I'm anxious how this short-story will mold you as you grow as a writer. The emotional content from a perspective not seen is quite brilliant. I believe you captured that aspect pretty well, as well as expressing the song you were given. Great work.

I hope you win girl! You deserve it. =)

You make me sad, Stephanie.

I'll be honest. I never expected the story would be this good. I never thought you would be a good writer. (Wow, now that I'm actually writing that it sounds really mean. Which I guess it is.) That was an amazing story.

There were a couple mistakes -- minor mistakes.
When he's talking about his heart being a countdown: "mistook for beating" should be "misTAKEN for beating"
"After countless of talks": you don't need the "of"
"As far as she could was concerned" should probably be "as far as she was concerned."

Take them or leave them, just my thoughts.

This was so beautiful, and yet sad. I really love that the story is told from the ghost's perspective, and it goes great with the song. I don't know how I'm going to win this contest now...

first of all, YAY IM THE FIRST COMMENTER! second of all, that was such a sad story!!!! but it was really good stevers. youve got a way with words. :D