Seeing Monsters - Comments

i would love for u to finish or write more chapters to i loved it

I know this put up a while ago, and I don't know if you have any intention on finishing it or writing more or if it was just a one-shot. It leaves many questions, though. :o What if Synyster was Brian's alter ego or what if he had a personality disorder? What happened to the other girls? Is he trying to find her? How did she get out? This was written..beautifully. And while that may seem weird, everything flowed so easily and nothing was forced. I haven't read something this good in a while.

I liked the style this was written in, it was different. A very good kind of different though. Ever thought about putting more too it? There's a lot of questions. How'd she get out, what happened to Syn, maybe they'll meet again. Or Syn could be Brian Haner's little secret kinda thing and she meets Brian and freaks.... I think there's quite a lot of direction for this story. I could go on for a while talking about this and that and how good it is but you should already know that! ;) If you do write more or not its still so great! Thank you for posting this story. :D

This was definitely a refreshing read, and I really enjoyed the style that this was written in. I felt the fast pacing really fit the anxiety and fear that the character was experiencing. I also thought that the descriptions were absolute perfection because you really balanced the line between bogging the reader down with meaningless detail and not providing enough detail, leaving the reader clueless.

My only suggestion, as far as conrit goes, is that I felt like the tone didn't really match the character. There are many instances where I feel like you get way too wordy for a nineteen year old, and that makes it a little unbelievable. This wouldn't be so much of a big deal if this was written in third-person, but it isn't.

Okay. So I was happy to get this story in comment swap because you are like one of my favorite authors on Mibba and I seriously love every story I have read by you and this is no exception. You are a very great writer!!!!! :)

Love the update:DDD
But I have a feeling she'll soon be with the monster again.

Oh wow this story is amazing,whenever you get the time or "feel" to write and post some more of this one i will be the first on to read them : D

Please write more!! This is truely amazing, and diffrent from anything else ive read on mibba.

I CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER.... THIS IS MY NEW ADDICTION:)
If you need a banner let me know:DDD I would love to make one for you because your story is simply AMAZING^_^

I agree with HailMisery this story sounds epic and I really cannot wait for you to write more, its original and so far I fucking love it!
More please!
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I love it, I seriously can't wait to read more... :) "Subscribes"