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  • diorissa

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    devin oliver is so yummy :3
    and love your story <3
    June 24th, 2012 at 01:18pm
  • Niall James Horan.

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    The storyline is good, but your grammar and punctuation isn't that good. A lot of your sentences are extremely awkward too. Maybe you can get a beta reader to help you out! (:
    December 20th, 2010 at 07:43pm
  • AmeliaDef

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    have i told you that devin oliver is just ihdjsdnlkasj?
    love it so far! more to go will be great <3
    November 26th, 2010 at 02:49pm
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