Tongue Tied - Comments

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....well....that went well...

Why do you keep saying, I know what your thinking? I am not thinking any of that omg bahaha

YOU UPDATED WITHOUT TELLING ME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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*grumbling*
it was awesome and made me feel a tad bit better!
also CLIFFHANGER!?!?!? me no likey!!!!!!!

Love it, it's been a while tho but I'm glad tht Brian and Charlie r dating now, anyhoo can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)

This was all in all, pretty good. I liked your descriptions and use of detail. I sorta fell in love with the story though it was hard to follow in some places. I don't think drug is the past tense of drag, if that is what you were going for in chapter...2? Even if it is, it just sounds off. Oh, and is Brian based on a real person? Cuz if he is, I totally want to meet him! <3 And I adore your layout BTW!

Your first chapter is the summary of the story, which belongs in the summary section, not chapter section. Your story can be reported for that.
Adding on to my comment you give detailed descriptions which are nice. I feel that adding a wider range of vocabulary to the story would make it a tad bit better, best of luck.

Adding on to my comment you give detailed descriptions which are nice. I feel that adding a wider range of vocabulary to the story would make it a tad bit better, best of luck.

Your first chapter is the summary of the story, which belongs in the summary section, not chapter section. Your story can be reported for that.

i must admit at first i didn't really like this story (not sure why) but it grew on me after reading all of it i enjoyed it for the most part. i think when you write in Brian's pov you need to be more conscious that its a male pov (he seems really feminine in some parts). but overall good and i'm intrigued by the sequel so nice job :)

Oh my goodness, sorry I can't get it to let me fix this. :S
It was well written but I kind of felt like the whole thing happened a little bit too fast for my taste. I feel like I didn't really get the chance to understand the characters as much as I would have liked. Other than that it was very cute and I'm very glad that there is a sequel!
Is what I meant to say. Sheesh.

It all happened a little bit fast for my taste. But other than that it was very well written! It was great!

I loved this! It was so cute, and I couldn't stop reading it. I am most definitely reading the sequel. I just... asdfghjkl... I loved this story. You used good details, which I love. Good work, I'm very impressed!

I'm sorry. Mibba is not agreeing with my computer.

Alright, so I really like this. Nervous Brian is so cute xD the only thing I'd change is the way you have your dialogue spaced. It's supposed to be a separate paragraph every time someone different talks. But other than that is lovely :)

Alright, so I really like this. Nervous Brian is just so cute. The only thing I'd change is the way you have your dialogue grouped. It should be spaced. But other than that this is lovely :)

loved the updaqte. finally got to read it since i was out of town. cant wait for the nect update or the sequel!

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loveeeeeee the story! nice update!
can't wait for more!
also the ending was acliffhanger and i hates it!!!
i was liek YES SMUT...NOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!

new reader!
aw... so sad :'(
Brian's world should fall apart with her's, he should realize what hes missing and they should get together already!

hello hello hello!!!!!
love love love LOVE!!!!
i tell you my ideas and such when we takl so no need to repeat them here. bu tyeah love!!!!

Awwww thts sooo sad she lost her baby through a miscarriage oh my how is everyone goin to take the news Brian is goin to feel guilty becuz he was the source if her miscarriage :( can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)