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Ah!
You’re killing me!
I can’t wait to see what’s going to happen next.
Thomas is married in this version, which is going to be make for a lot of drama because who knows how is wife is going to react when she find out or who knows, she might not find out, but – ah! I’ve got so many thoughts running through my head and I want to know if his dad is going to get sick again or what is going to happen, but you should update soon! :)

Your frickin words KILL ME. I love your style so very, very much! It's beautiful without being obnoxious. You've made a healthy balance between the words you write and what's happening in the story. IDK a lot of the time I feel like a story is either beautifully written, yet kind of dull. So you've done a great job at achieving a balance, so hats off to you for that. Even though you didn't leave the last chapter at a cliff hanger, I'm still really anxious to see what happens next. So keep writing gurl!

It doesn’t matter how many times you restart this story – I love it!
And I honestly can’t wait to see what you have in store.
Also, I’m really hoping and praying that this time Fern will be able to make an appearance because I’ve been patiently waiting for what seems like forever to have her interact with Thomas!
Now, I’m going to impatiently wait to see what you have in store . . .

Chapter Six:

Wait. Wait. Wait. Wait.
that letter . . . is his dad dead or is he in the hospital?
I'm nervous, because I know you've made changes to the story from the original so now I'm wondering if his dad died without him even going to visit him while he's at the hospital. And I know that they didn't get on, they didn't have a good relationship, but still, I'm a little worried and have to read on because I need to know what's going on . . .

Chapter Five:



That little bunny perfectly captures the look I had while I was reading this chapter.
It made me love Fern, and it made me giddy at the thought of this somewhat shy man going along with her wild adventures and sometimes getting into trouble, and it just made me think about how much he must’ve loved her to have gone along with her plans when he’d seen them go wrong before.
And that last sentence! It’s heartbreaking because he loved her so much and obviously they broke up, otherwise he wouldn’t have gotten married, but I just want to know why they broke up. What got in the way? What ended it? And who ended it? Was it her? Because I don’t know if he would’ve done it, what with how much he loved her. And the fact that he’s never loved anyone that much again – ah!
Onto the next chapter!

Chapter Four:

I haven’t even finished reading the chapter. In fact, I just read the first sentence, but I love the fact that you ended chapter three with it and used chapter four, it made for a really good transition, and honestly, its making me feel like I’m watching a show. Kind of like I used to feel whenever I watched How I Met Your Mother . . .

No. No. No. NO!!!!
Thom, you fool!
You do not fault a woman because your ass cheated. Although I must admit that I love that you wrote him saying that, because that is most definitely a typical male thing to do. But anyways. He fucking cheated on her! Fucking Thom! Por que? And just when I thought it couldn’t get worse, he brought his daughter into the argument! UGH! I swear I wanted to magically transport myself into the story and tell him to shut the fuck up, because he’s just screwing himself over even worse.

AHHH!!
Is the her in question, Fern?!
Please tell me it is. And omg this is major because Sarah knows about Fern, which means that she had to mean something to him within the last – if they were married four years, I’m going to assume they dated at least two – six years. What happened with Fern?! I must know! I must! Because if Sarah hates her, then some serious shit had to have gone down!

Also, I was so certain that I had recommended this story, but it seems that I have not and I am going to fix that immediately!

Chapter Three:

The end of the chapter was too much for me!
I genuinely felt second hand embarrassment for Thom even though he clearly didn’t. I mean, I do understand that one night stands can be a bit of a blur and that you might remember a name, but that’s why its best not to call them by a name. But he was so sure that she was Natalie and she was actually Valeria, and that is just mortifying to me! But oh my goodness! This is not the Thom I knew and I am loving it. Also, I’m incredibly to learn more about why he and his wife are getting divorced. I get that he might not have been the best husband, but there had to be something to make Sarah snap and I’m hoping that I will learn what that was in the next four chapters you have posted . . .

How can I bribe you for more updates?!

What the fuck happened to Thom?
hahaha not that I don't like it. Just damn.
Thom decided that he wanted to be a bit of a jerk, and I'm digging it.
FUck. What? I'm still trying to mentally sort things out, but yeah, I'm into this!
I can't wait to see how things are going to go in this Thom's world. It's rad. It's honestly fucking rad.

I lack the ability to properly convey how excited I am that you've decided to bring this gem back.
Honestly, when you said you weren't going to work on it anymore, I got all sorts of sad, but it's back!
And I loved reading the prologue. Those familiar words were so beautiful and perfect, and now I'm onto the next update!

. . . now that I've gotten that out of my system, I can leave a proper comment.
and sadly, my proper comment has me being an emotional mess, because FERN IS THERE
and he thinks he might still LOOOVE her.
you can't just end a chapter there and say that you're not sure you're gonna finish the story!
that's mean!!
this story is so amazing. I love how you write it from his perspective.
I even have a voice I read it in, well, it's a mental voice.
for some reason I hear Eddie Redmayne narrating the story . . .
oh I do hope you'll finish this. it's a spectacular story!

you've been sitting on this chapter for two months?!?!

how can you do that?
oh no, no, no!
that is a crime!
it should be illegal to not post things as soon as they've been written
because you torture uuuuuuuussssss!

FERN?!?!
this just got even more interesting.
fuuuuuuck.
how's he going to react?
that's his Fern!!

IT'S FERRRRRRRNNN!!!
ahhh my emotions and thoughts have gone crazy!
It's Fern! It's Fern! It's Fern!
I wonder what he's going to say! How he's going to react!
Oh you must update this soon, YOU MUST!
I am just going to sit here and drive myself crazy with thinking about everything that might be said between them!

so he's alone in Riverside . . . all alone.
waiting to read what happens next is going to be torture.
sheer fucking torture.

This . . . this was heartbreaking.
I could visualize Thom stumbling out of the pub, falling onto the ground, puking and then the shower scene.
For some reason I could see the shocked and pained expression on his face.
Lauren is sweet and very kind, but I can’t help but not completely like her.
From the few times that Fern has come into play, I’ve grown attached to her so Lauren is someone I can’t like, but enough of my rambling.
I'm really anxious to see what happens to Thom :)

AHHHH!
This update has made me so very, very, very HAPPY!
I know I’ve said this before, but this is honestly one of my favorite stories!
I love how it’s following him around. Few stories show it from the male perspective and this one does it so beautifully! I'm real worried about Fern, as well as his father. I hope there will be an update out soon and perhaps . . . I could bribe you into updating this sooner? If not, I understand. You’re a very busy lady! :)

hahahahaha
that old man of his was screaming at that poor nurse.
fuck. there's nothing that makes me laugh harder than old people screaming at youngsters.