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good I was thinking is this girl mean?
and GRR I HATE the mom I just want to slap her upside the face!

I love him! He is such a good brother! :D

I'm in love with your writing style! It's so witty, and you gave Elijah so much personality through his narration. I gotta say, the layout and title are what originally drew me in, and they totally fit with the story. This is so heartwarming and funny at the same time.
You've found a perfect balance between seriousness and fun with this story, and I'm eager to read more. :)

Just started reading this story, and it's amazing! I love your writing style, it's something that I don't think I've read before. And your detail is amazing. This is a story well-written, and well deserving of more subscribers! Update soon.

Oh goodness. Cara's the best. I have a feeling I've met her somewhere before... *shifty eyes*
Anyways, I'm so glad you're writing more of this, it's the bestest.

I legit LOVE Pee Wee and Cara :D I wish I had those people in my life, though when it comes to the hopless romantic stuff I am just like Cara, but I love her character because it is a contradiction to the normal in a way because jocks are suppose to be tough and have no hearts, but Cara is the opposite way which makes me lover her character more than I did before :D

I'm really really liking this so far! I discovered it today and just kept reading because it's so entertaining! I love how simple yet intriguing your writing style is. You combine the feel-good humorous and relateable storyline with the serious one which is a really great mix when it comes to a story. I cannot wait until you update! Seriously. I'll be waiting by the computer for this one. Keep going! This is absolute gold. :)

Awwwww. Poor kid. At least he didn't read the other part. That would have been douchey. Meanwhile, I'm super glad you updated and can't wait for the next chapter!

Gosh, i cant give you as long as a review as the person above me, but i like your story. it's really funny and the guy's someone i can really relate to, especially with his younger sister and all. thumbs up. :]

Chapter 1: This story is interesting and unique with a character that is definietly not perfect with a half nerdy/half I don't give a rat's ass that makes him likable and quirky. I like this so far, the dialogue, and of course the witty comments of our young hero such as "urges to procreate with worthy females" and "you, sex god, you"

Chapter 2: The mom is a psycho, of course. She is terribly heartless and a perfectly lovably character for interest (not lovable as in I like her, but it gives it a twist) Marney is adorable, Michelle is a nice mid way for the normal record. I didn't really feel anything about the dad, maybe you should add a paragraph about him???

Chapter 3: Interesting to say none-the-least of course the snarky new girl that eventually the MC is gonna get (he's gonna get her right, if he didn't that'd just be wrong) ohh lookie he didn't save her. That's kinda sad, lame, but unexpected. *Girls do play with their hair when they like a guy* aww sucks for him doesn't it...oh right. P.S-Pee Wee Sherman 42 Wallabe Way, Sydney SERIOUSLY FINDING NEMO. Anywhooo....:D "should have been my nose"

P.S-most of the time there's a new girl, even if she's pretty people don't flock like mules. Most are pretty indifferent. :P (I've been a new girl every year of my whole life I got this shtich down.)

Chapter 4: Invisble Man is a bit overused cliche, of course, but...I still love it. Maybe she should have given him a pencil or something, some notice??? Its not like she's a blind wombat. Anyway. He got in trouble for snoozing, woow. So he got in trouble, not the nerd afterall. Dad got in an accident, scary. GIves us a little insight into his character maybe, what accident, why isn't he devistated?? Oh he saw his little girlfriend dancing, beautiful description, loved it. :P

Chapter 5: This was pretty darn sad, predicatable, but sad. I don't think I can really understand much about his father though. I think you should edit the family chapter and give him some character since all the others are stealing his limelight. I feel I don't know the father at all. he was very vague in the family chapter then he gets drunk and gets in an accident, a little inside, and now he's leaving? What??? Anywhoo. Mom was typical byotch again. Poor little Marney though soo sad. She's so adorable sounding! Oh and I loved "her voice wripped otu of her throat like a potato peeler on bare, baby skin." Or something like that, created such violent imagery! wonderful!

Honey I love this story too much for words. And you even added Scooter in here! Ahh! That made me happy. Even though the chapter itself was sad. Keep writing this!

You're such a great writer!!! I loooove this story so much <3
I can't wait until you post again! :D

o wow that is very original legit anyway so good adn wow and happiness and cutest is good :)

Aw snap. Well, I'm kind of pleasantly surprised that it's something other than cheating that breaks them up. Poor poor guy. Oh, gosh, a divorce. That's terrible. I am awaiting more cuteness and fluffiness <3

Ahhhh! What's going on? Can't wait for the next chapter! Meanwhile our little guy is falllllllllllling for Luisa, lol. And I can't wait to see what happened with the Dad...

wow this chapter is EPIC and um wow it tells you alot, and nothing at the same time I love it :D (i have no idea if what I said makes sense but I can't explain it)

This is REALLY good :D I really like it and I'm so curious where it is going to go :)

Haha, I love this story!!!!! (:

Haha, I love this story!!!!! (:

awwwwww i love this ^_^
it actually kinda reminds me of some of my friends hahahaa
keep up the good work