Again I'm shocked at the lack of comments, because this is really good. I was going to quote my favorite line, but then I probably would have ended up quoting the whole story! (: the characters are so believable in relation to their situation, my heart goes out to Riley and his parents. It's horrible that he blames himself. I like how you revealed more and more of the story through the chapter, and then letting it drop that she had killed herself just at the end, its really effective. The only thing that I can say I didn't like, is the fact is that the story ended there! Would have been great if there was more... (:
November 25th, 2010 at 08:01pm