Noble Steed - Comments

I really adore this it was so...sweet, and tragic in a way. The Romeo and Juliet reference was perfect in this aspect, it would've been even more interesting if you kind of talked about a rivalry between their lifestyles. The Montagues and the Capulets rivalry you know? One thing though, you say she's light as a feather and then talk about how he's straining under her weight. You continuously changed that saying she was light but then she was heavy, so I think you might want to go through and fix that. Otherwise, very lovely story. :)

That was simply wonderful; I really adore your way with words. You have great flow and your descriptions make me jealous. The way you described her hair was amazing and I could picture every moment of this story, it's great. I like how the photo is incorporated into the story and not just there too.

Awww. That was lovely. Very clear prose and the flow of the story was perfectly paced. I quite liked it. :)

Firstly, I loved how you used the picture in this beautiful layout. Secondly,
I have to say I think this story is brilliant and touching. I like how you got that story
from this picture and how far your imagination can go. I would have never thought of
this. You write very elegantly and I loved reading this. Great job :)

Beautifully written. This is really promising and I love your style.