Like Dr. said, this was brilliant. The way you described the scenery at the club was amazing. I felt the tension and the atmosphere of the place. And how you referred to the other girl as Envy. It seemed to add even more tension to the moment. And the ending, just, wow. I feel bad for Fawn, she hadn't even done anything.
Overall, you're an amazing writer, and this was an amazing piece.
The way you described the scenery at the club was amazing. I felt the tension and the atmosphere of the place. And how you referred to the other girl as Envy. It seemed to add even more tension to the moment. And the ending, just, wow. I feel bad for Fawn, she hadn't even done anything.
Overall, you're an amazing writer, and this was an amazing piece.