Diary of a KillJoy - Comments

I like your style of writing, however, your sentences are not in pastence.

both of your my chem stories are really good!
:')

I like this. Good personality through the whole thing, I like how it's very personal. I wasn't really paying attention to the other characters though, because you were developing the singular character so much and they were mostly flat, other than 'Mini Ray' that is.

It's good, but the chapters should be longer. Also, "Mini Ray"s name is Grace, the bad guy played by grant morrisons name is Korse, and Dr.DeathDefying is just a dj. Thats all he is. Get the characters right.
I still subscribed though. n.n

Loveeeeit!!!!

not really sure i get the point though, dear.

I am glad you mentioned it as diary entries because the chapters were extremely short. I like this and the concept of this. I think you can make this into sooo much more. Maybe you have more info on the characters and I am missing it... (which is possible) I think characther history and descriptions of each battle would make this very enjoyable. The quick short chapters do create a quick fast paced story and keeps me guessing so that is good for that aspect as well. Very good in general. Thanks

Mark

Love this.
Really good characterization and realistic narrative voice through the diary, and I love how you got in all the references :)
I'd love more!
xo