Mind Tricks. - Comments

I'm sure you've been told this thousands of times bur your description is simply flawless. It's extremely raw and shows so much more than simple description. I can imagine the scenery with such clarity and I especially loved the first paragraph, actually all paragraphs that held that same imaginative description. You're an amazing writer! As for the beginning of the plot, I was so sure that she would find her boyfriend with another girl and not his cousin. That was definitely a surprise. I was kinda hoping she would, I need to stop being so pessimistic, though. xD

Rereading the one-shot, it brings curiosity. I was wondering how she got to the state she was in, why she thought he was cheating on her. Or if she's simply crazy and makes shit up. Which indeed goes with the title. But you kinda left it hanging there, for the readers to interpret what would happen next. Overall, it was an interesting read and if you turned this into a story, I'd definitely read it.

Keep up the amazing work. :D

Oh my goodness. When I read those three words on the summery, I thought that this one-shot was going to really sad. As I began reading it, I really thought that he was really cheating on her, but I am glad he wasn't; I really loved the unexpected ending. The emotion was nicely portrayed through the girl and her reaction to finding her boyfriend with another girl, and then finding out it is his cousin was spot on. You have really done a wonderful job; I really liked this one-shot.

Okay, so first, I'm in love with the simplicity of the layout. And the banner is absolutely gorgeous. I won't lie; this totally made me sad. I never understood how guys can do that to a girl. It sort of scares me out of relationships :( Anyways, I really like how it builds up, kinda like in the movies. The only one I can really think of that goes through this sequence of events is Pearl Harbor. >.> Anyways, she's crying and sad and thinking that the guy she loved is the biggest asshole in the world. She finally catches him in the act and yells at him and...she's his cousin? o.O Whoa, wait, huh!? That's...really weird. Okay, nix on the Pearl Harbor deal, but I thought he was really cheating on her! Wow, you truly have a thing for great buildups. I'll admit, this one made me go ...O.O! xD
I have no idea why this doesn't have a million and one comments on it. It's truly something great :D And no, it's not ew. Not at all.
Lovely job, hun! <333 :D

xD That was amazing.<3
Despite the fact that she was bugging, I found this cute. :)
A little sad at the beginning, but I liked the build-up. C:

The banner totally sets you off what this will be about aha. xD<3
Really, really nice read. C:

I think you did a great job, dearie. :)

This was good.
Swap? I wrote a new short.

XD Love it. Beautifully written..and the ending well it made me laugh..=D

Bizous
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