Disallusioned Mentality. - Comments

ooh I really love this :) I wanna find out what happened! :) It's really written well, I just want to read more and more...fantastic! :)

I like the title, for one.
Very nice writing.
And then I woke up, and I recalled this disturbing fact. This dream would never happen.
I really like that ending, for some reason.
Anyway, a few typos here and there, but overall great.

thank you so much, to be honest, most of this story is what's going on in my mind, so that's probably why it's so easy for me to write about it deeply like that
again, thank you so much (:

thank you so much, to be honest, most of this story is what's going on in my mind, so that's probably why it's so easy for me to write about it deeply like that
again, thank you so much (:

You write beautifully. You really capture the intense emotion in the dream and how she feels, and how he does too. Seriously, amazing talent.
I also really like the title, it made me want to read the story :)
Good first chapter! :)