April 13th, 2011 at 11:17pm
"Is it the boy who chose to spend his Thanksgiving break with family and football?
Is it the girl who spent her time planning for Black Friday?
Is it the boy who chose to get more than four hours of sleep?
Is it the girl who spent her time writing, instead of studying?"
That's such a wonderful observation, finals are always at the worst time of the year. I love good satire, and this definitely fits that. The tone you used almost reminds of the short story "The Lottery," if you've heard of it.
However, some concrit; The layout is really awkward. Not just the background picture, which I can understand and look away from, but the colors. I had to click custom layout, because the colors don't really match up and it did make it harder to read.
Also the way you made new lines randomly (though I'm sure to you it's not) disrupted the flow completely in some spots. I mean, I think I get why you did it, but it doesn't work in my opinion. Not in this piece, not written like this. Not matched with the layout either.
But like I said, the general idea is really good.