Monster, Monster - Comments

This was so exciting. I really, really enjoyed it. I was on the edge of my seat the whole time. :o
You really did a fantastic job with this. <3

First of all, I kept reading Lee as Leo, for obvious reasons.

This was excellent. I loved the content; the way he started out thinking was a monster, realized what it was, and took care of it. Very dark. It gave me chills.

Well done!

Holy f*ck.
That is all.
Just...ohmygod.
<3

Again, so chilling! Wow, you really know how to scare someone out of their wits, girl. Really. Like, I could guess what was going on at the beginning but to find out I was really right...wow. <3 Great job with this.

I thought this monster was Freddy. :D You know, the claws and shizz? Anyways, you left me speechless at the end. Like, whoamygoshness. I love how it had such simple thoughts but such huge impact on my mind. Excellent. The ending was chilling by the way.

I kinda thought that Lee would bee the "monster" in the beginning, but obviously not.
I like the way you tell it with a childish view on things, it makes it all the more horrifying really.

The ending wasn't totally surprising.
But was amazing.

Well done I say, well done.

Oh my effing george. This actually made me tear up, no lie. I thought this was like a real monster, and then it turned out to be that dad! D: No way.

Great job. <33

The ending came as a surpsise, that's for sure. I did enjoy this - and I think you make your writing style your own. The only thing more I could have asked for was more personalization of your layout. But overall, well done.

Whoa whoa whoa, now this was very intriguing. It's like A Child Called It[//u] sort of backwards, instead of mean mommy he got a mean daddy and he and his mother were hurt, not just him. Ok, it's nothing like A Child Called It but it has the same concept :)

This was pretty amazing, not gonna lie.

My eyes were as wide as saucers the whole time I read it, and I just kept thinking 'Whoa, whoa. WHOAWHOAWHOA.'

Holy crackers!

I literally thought that the monster would be some paranoid delusion that the boy was experiencing, not his father. It totally slapped me in the face as I read on, and the story started inching towards his dad as the monster.

I applaud you, I really do. You turned this into a decent and well written piece of work. Well done. :)

:O <--- This is my face.
Okay, that was unexpected, that last line. Wow, that was just crazy. I love it!

I like how you started it, and I loved how you ended it!

At first I was getting this intesne Freddy Kruger vibe.
As it continued and intensified, I was like Oh shizz. D: </3

At the end, when the monster was the father I was ready to cry for some reason, aha.
This was amazing. (:
You're like, one of the best writers I know, missy.<3

That was intense, but I loved it.
I thought it was amazing. Although it was short, you packed a lot of simplicity in your words that struck a cord. The details were amazing.

Oh my god.

Oh my god.

Oh my god.

Oh my god.

This was powerful and amazing and wowza.

I like the child-like language you used. I loved this.

WOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOW.