August 2nd, 2013 at 06:26am
I like the softness but also the murky kind of feel to the layout, I usually don't care for murky colors but these worked well together. I also liked very much how the title stuck out and wasn't completely matching the background colors.
I think that the summary could have a better hook but I didn't think it was bad.
This was really interesting. It's been a long while since I read anything that had to do with anorexia and it's been even longer since I've read it about "Ana" I think that you've got a good story so far. One thing I saw in the last chapter, it would be sandwich au fromage, it was a little thing, just a misspelling, I hope you didn't mind me pointing it out.
This really was an interesting story to read and the short chapters helped also. The flow was nice overall and I'm pretty curious to see where Brigitta will end up and whether not she will listen to Ana.
It took me a while to catch on to who-and what- Ana is and stands for, but once I did I got kind of excited since the way you're writing it -or her- is wonderfully true. I can't wait to find out if Brigitta will succumb to Ana, or if she'll overcome her obsession of perfection and venture into recovery.